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Failure is proof that ones ambition was not strong enough. To what extent do you agree?

#failure #proof #ones #ambition
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Failure
 is proof that
ones
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ambition
 was not strong enough." I do not agree with the above statement because
being
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failure
 does not determine the amount of hard work
one
 has done and his commitment to his desire. When we begin to do any work, there are mainly two possibilities which can come
as a result
.Either, we will be successful in doing that
task
 or we will fail to do that
task
. But if we fail, it does not indicate that our commitment towards our
task
 was not strong enough. Sometimes, to achieve our
ambition
 we need more skill than we have at present. Sometimes, we are not that
much
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experienced to do that
task
.For which,
one
 will fail to do that
task
. But that doesn't mean we will not do that
task
 being afraid of
failure
. We will give our best to do that
task
 in
in
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the future.
Moreover
, winning and losing are part and parcel of our life.
Everytime
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 we cannot win even
our
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if our
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ambition
 is strong enough. It is said that
failure
 is the first step towards success.That's why
,
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 it's ok to fail. It is not
guarranted
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guaranteed
 that
one
 will be successful every time even if his desire is strong enough.
One
 can't enjoy the true taste of winning if he did not taste the bitterness of failing.
Besides
,
one
 can gain more experience and can know their mistake.Eventually, they will be successful in the future by gaining the experience they made by feeling.
To conclude
, to be successful at any work
one
 needs to fail to gain more experience and to learn from their mistake.
Failure
 does not indicate
one
's desire or
ambition
 is not strong enough.Eventually
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failure
 will lead us to be successful. That's why
,
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failure
 is very important in our life.
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