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Some teachers think international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students do you think it's advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days many teachers argue that all secondary school pupils should take part in international exchange programs because of
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While
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 who exchange in America, but
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. On the one hand, from my
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. Teenagers have more opportunities to learn
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 peers and his mind browned his horizon. In conclusion,
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 to participate in these programs.
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