To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?
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the population
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apply
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food
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a source
food
.
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good for human, also
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insect-based
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being crushed and cooked, that we can still retain its vitamins and minerals, is more acceptable than eating the Change the verb form
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insects
itself, however
we have to be Add a comma
,however
carefull
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careful
also
on the kinds of insects
that we will ingest. There are lots of insects
that are also
poisonous and not suitable for comsumption
, we always have to make sure Correct your spelling
consumption
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insects
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will give us problems like food
poisoining
and Correct your spelling
poisoning
other disease
in the future.
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another disease
other diseases
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,since the pros overweight its cons, eating insects
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insect
food
is good
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