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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart displays the average sum of foreign
students
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, which study abroad in the
USA
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,
UK
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,
Australia
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 and
Canada
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,
while
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, the table illustrates their proportion in two different
years
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.
Overall
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, the first three countries, the
USA
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, the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 have a higher increment in their
number
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 of foreign
students
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 than
Canada
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. In comparison, the
number
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 of foreign
students
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 in 2012 is significantly higher than in 2004.
Moreover
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, the proportion of people who studied abroad in the
last
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 three countries has increased noticeably, meanwhile, in the
USA
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, it remained constant. Looking
initially
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 at the bar graph, the highest
number
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 of foreign
students
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 is in the
USA
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, which grew approximately 70000 from 170000 in 2004 to 240000 in 2012. In the next two countries, people who studied abroad in
UK
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 and
Australia
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 were around 120000 in 2004 and rose to nearly under 20000 in 2012. Ultimately,
Canada
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 is ranked as the lowest country with foreign
students
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, and the
number
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 didn’t change
meningfully
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meaningfully
 in 8
years
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, from 35000 in 2004 to over 55000 in 2012. Regarding the remaining table, in
Australia
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 the percentage of overseas
students
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 has increased substantially with 5% in eight
years
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, from 19% in 2004 to 24% in 2012,
therefore
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 it represents the highest country of overseas
students
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 resembling the
USA
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,
UK
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 and
Canada
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. The figures for the
UK
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 and
Canada
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 went up slightly from 9% and 5% in 2004 to 13% and 7% in 2012 respectively.
Whereas
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 the situation in the
USA
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 remained unchanged over time with 2% in both
years
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,
hence
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 it has the lowest percentage compared to all English-speaking states.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, usa, uk, australia, canada, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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