The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant
The map depicts the alteration of West
Park
Secondary School which
surveyed
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in 1950, 1980, and 2010. In general, in 1980, the building focused on places that related to
sport
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sports
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and
hobby
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hobbies
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.
Whereas
in 2010 concentrated
to
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enlargement of
parking
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the parking
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area. In detail, before being altered into
parking
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a parking
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area and science block in 1980, the land was fully constructed by residential areas and farmland.
Furthermore
, parking spaces
constructed
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in
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the east side of
science
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the science
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block so people
able
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to
park
their cars there.
In addition
, the secondary school and the playground
which
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located behind the school
were remained
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fairly unchanged.
On the other hand
, the environment of West
Park
concentrated on the bigger size of
car
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park
. After
changed
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the size of the parking spaces, the government resized
sport
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sports
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paces and
playground
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playgrounds
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. It might be happened because of the bigger population in
the
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apply
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West
Park
.
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