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In some countries,most people do not have internet due to lack of money.the government should be held accountable so that everyone can get internet. To what extent do you agree?

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people
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 do not have much money to
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Internet
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The governments
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 should be held accountable for ensuring that
everyone
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 can get
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 to the
Internet
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. In today's modern world, one can't live a single moment without
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internet
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. We are fully dependent on
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Internet
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.  Still, there are many
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 who are not able to
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Internet
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.
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, the
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 who are living in
village
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the village
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 . In
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the village
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 ,
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 the poor networking system , the villagers are not being able to use the
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.  The
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 should install
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 towers so that
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 can get
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. 
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, by using the
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, the villagers will be benefitted
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 their profession. In villages, 90% of the villagers are farmers.  By using the
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, they will be able to communicate with the buyer directly which will help them to get the right amount of money for their products. Eventually,  there will be a rise in their standard of living.
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,  there are many
people
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 who are not being able to
access
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due to
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 lack of money. The
government
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 should come forward in
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 for all
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people
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, the unemployed will be able to get employed . There are many
people
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 who are unemployed because they don't have
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. 
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Government
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 will be able to solve it .
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 during the Covid 19 Pandemic ,
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 were not able to go to
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work
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 or school. The
people
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 who had
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,  were able to continue their
work
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 but the
people
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 who were in lack of
internet
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 didn't continue their
work
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as a result
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 , they were unemployed. If
Government
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 had taken some steps so that
everyone
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 can get
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Internet
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,  they would be able to continue their 
work
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. Thereby,
Government
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 should be held accountable for ensuring
Internet
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access
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 to
everyone
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.  Without the help of
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internet
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 ,
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poor
people
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 will not be able to use the
Internet
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 which will affect their lifestyle. That's why
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Government
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 should take relevant measures in
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 matter .
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