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In some countries,most people do not have internet due to lack of money.the government should be held accountable so that everyone can get internet. To what extent do you agree?

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In some countries , most
of
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the
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people
 do not have much money to
access
 the
Internet
 .
The governments
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Governments
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 should be held accountable for ensuring that
everyone
 can get
access
 to the
Internet
. In today's modern world, one can't live a single moment without
internet
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. We are fully dependent on
Internet
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.  Still, there are many
people
 who are not able to
access
 the
Internet
.
Firstly
, the
people
 who are living in
village
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the village
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 . In
village
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the village
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 ,
due to
 the poor networking system , the villagers are not being able to use the
Internet
.  The
government
 should install
Internet
 towers so that
everyone
 can get
Internet
. 
Moreover
, by using the
Internet
, the villagers will be benefitted
in
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 their profession. In villages, 90% of the villagers are farmers.  By using the
Internet
, they will be able to communicate with the buyer directly which will help them to get the right amount of money for their products. Eventually,  there will be a rise in their standard of living.
Secondly
,  there are many
people
 who are not being able to
access
 the
Internet
due to
 lack of money. The
government
 should come forward in
this
 regard. By ensuring
Internet
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 for all
the
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people
, the unemployed will be able to get employed . There are many
people
 who are unemployed because they don't have
Internet
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the Internet
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. 
Government
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 will be able to solve it .
Besides
 during the Covid 19 Pandemic ,
people
 were not able to go to
their
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work
 or school. The
people
 who had
Internet
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,  were able to continue their
work
 but the
people
 who were in lack of
internet
 didn't continue their
work
as a result
 , they were unemployed. If
Government
 had taken some steps so that
everyone
 can get
Internet
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the Internet
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,  they would be able to continue their 
work
. Thereby,
Government
 should be held accountable for ensuring
Internet
access
 to
everyone
.  Without the help of
internet
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 ,
the
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poor
people
 will not be able to use the
Internet
 which will affect their lifestyle. That's why
,
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Government
 should take relevant measures in
this
 matter .
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