You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter: •introduce yourself, •say why you are interested in this sports club •ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

Dear Sir or Madam, Hope you're doing well. My name is Kunwar and I have recently joined a private
College
besides
the sports
club
owned by you. I am writing
this
letter because I want to join the sports
club
. It is
also
convenient for me to attend the
club
because it
situated
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at the nearest place of the
College
. In fact, the
College
does not have proper sports facilities and I cannot live without physical activities. As I earlier mentioned
that
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I am a new student
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at
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of
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at
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the
College
and enrolled here for the diploma certification in Political Science. After my class, I have plenty of spare time and I think, it is a better idea to spend my free time in a positive activity at the
club
rather than scrolling my mobile phone. If you don't mind, please provide details of the facilities and
also
describe how many
member
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members
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are registered in the
club
. Please don't forget to inform
about
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us about
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the charges of the
club
and
also
explain the procedure
of
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for
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depositing the fee. I hope you will take my humble request seriously and
allowed
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me to join the
club
to utilise my spare time with
positive
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a positive
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approach. Yours Faithfully, Kunwar
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear, distinct idea to maintain structure and clarity.
Task Achievement
For an enhanced task response, consider explicitly stating your specific interests or which facilities you're most looking forward to using at the club.
Overall
You might want to check your letter for minor grammatical errors or typing mistakes that could be easily corrected with a quick review.
Structure
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
Content
You have effectively communicated your intentions and reasons for wanting to join the sports club.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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