Many children these days face difficulties to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the causes of this situation? What could be the possible solutions?

a generation ago, infants are very much concerned about their studies which are now falling down.
However
, Institutions are facing concentration-related
problem
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from their class
children
.
This
essay will look at the core reasons for
this
and propose some solid solutions. One of the main causes of the
problem
is that less sleep. By
this
I mean, if sleep will not get the proper amount
then
people are likely to focus on other things with their half sleep.
For example
, infants usually go to sleep late at night, so they have to wake up early in the morning and they are not able to concentrate on the teacher's lecture . The solution is for less sleep by restricting their night times activities. Another
problem
is that giving a huge amount of time on mobile.
This
is to say, toddlers at early ages use electronic devices most. So their mind always focuses on
such
things. To tackle
this
issue, parents should set low limits on the hours their
children
for using mobile or other multimedia devices. A third issue of the
problem
is the percentage of study is quite low.To be more precise,
children
hardly give time to their studies,
As a result
, they don't understand and easily demotivate, and in the
classroom
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they don't want to give their attention to books. The way forward could be to notice their time management by parents.
To sum up
,
children
can be given less concentration on studies as I have mentioned above the possibilities that can occur. I believe that the more responsibility for solving the
problem
lies with depends only on parents.
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