Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, is it a good or bad thing? Discuss tour opinion.

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Human nature is always wanting more and cannot to content with what they have, so some people are addicted to purchasing newly released devices every now and

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. In my own point of view, I consider a negative habit, for it is likely to be impractical and shows unmanageable

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. Some people are constantly buying new upgraded technology, which I found

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unrealistic and impractical since it is not really necessary,

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they just want to show off to their mates that they have the latest version of the device. For ,instance one college student purchased the new iPhone pro-max, and on the other day, another student will probably have the same and show that he can have it too.

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attitude will make someone broke

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trying to look rich. Out of self-control in order to buy

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yourself in

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materialistic world shows poor discipline. Lack of self-discipline is often linked to fear of failure, that you cannot get what you want even though you tried so hard to get it.

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instance, if a person is in a state of panic buying, they tend to get everything for the reason that being afraid not to have it anymore.

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attitude should be tolerated,

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, it has to be overcome before it will lead to a

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struggle in the future, which is not good as well in the mental health of the person. In conclusion, indulging ourselves in newly released technology inculcate a bad habit of impulsive buying,

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crucial in the future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

266 words

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Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, is it a good or bad thing? Discuss tour opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

When choosing a job, while some people think that the salary is the most important thing to be taken into consideration, others have a diverse view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high amount of sugar which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree.