Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There is the opinion that modern life has overwhelmed
people
with choices
. I strongly agree with this
idea and think that the Internet
and globalization
contribute mostly to this
trend.
Admittedly, the Internet
has greatly expanded the choices
people
have. For instance
, we can access an almost endless number of video games via the Internet
. The Internet
allows us to learn almost all the games that have been produced in human history. However
, I argue that this
immensity forces people
to make too many choices
when deciding on which game to play and therefore
leads to confusion. A personal example would be my experience as a game player. When I was a kid, for each category of the video game, there are
usually fewer than five options. But for now, even when I only want to play Chinese chess online, I am faced with over 100 applications and countless websites which offer Chinese chess production or service.
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Internet
, globalization
also
plays an important role in this
chaos. For Instance
, globalization
allows International fast-food chain giants to enter the local market. Therefore
, the local restaurant business is crowded by local and International brands, when people
need to decide where to eat out, they have to make so
many judgements on which restaurant is an ideal choice, which can be really exhausting.
In conclusion, I totally agree that Rephrase
apply
people
in modern society are bothered by too many choices
and for me, the Internet
and globalization
are the two major factors to be blamed for it.Submitted by sabrinahuang0105 on
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task response
Provide a more balanced argument by acknowledging potential benefits of having more choices.
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