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Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.

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In recent years we have seen a considerable rise in dangerous or extreme play.
This
 essay shall discuss some of the main reasons why people engage in
such
 play and suggest ways in which some uncertainty involved in
such
 sport can be reduced. The main reason why people go for dangerous play is that they get the thrill out of them. They like taking prospects. They like to challenge their abilities and potential. They feel a sense of satisfaction when they come face to face with fears
while
 bungee jumping, rock climbing and so on.
In addition
, going through a dangerous experience gives them the courage and confidence to face the hurdles of their daily life. Another reason for pursuing
such
 businesses is that there is a lot of fame and money involved in them. They get attention by doing stunts on motorcycles and jumping from tall buildings. They make headlines in newspapers and TV News Channels. They feel great when their name comes in the Guinness Book of World Records. Once they get famous they get a lot of money
also
.
For instance
, many businesses hire them to endorse their products. They
also
 get jobs on the basis of
such
 skills. Many steps can be taken to reduce the peril involved.
Firstly
,
this
 business should be done under strict supervision. All safety precautions should be taken.
Such
 play should be performed after sufficient training and under the supervision of adults. sports companies which cater to
such
 play should require a licence for providing
such
 training. Some people suggest banning some sports.
However
, I do not believe that banning is a good solution. We all know that forbidden fruits taste sweeter and the community will do
such
 sport in hiding which would increase the hazard involved. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, the population do
such
 play for fun, for money and for fame.
However
,
the
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such
 business should be performed after sufficient training from licensed companies and under some supervision.
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