As countries develop, their population tend to live individually or small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society?

With the expansion of countries' development , life gets more difficult
therefore
people
choose to stay single or have fewer children.
people
are no longer willing to have extended family or involve in relationships.
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of ,all a
society
with a low birth rate would definitely face problems
such
as a lack of workers and an old population.
For example
in Germany ,the government had to invite immigrants to enter the country in order to fill the empty places.
Although
migration follows with other issues ,
this
was one of the solutions for Germany and other countries
such
as Canada which has the same problem with low birth.
secondly
, loneliness would cause certain issues
such
as depression.which is a total disaster for a government. because they undergo a lot of costs for medicine and other drugs.When a
society
is
aging
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the retirement department has to pay retired
people
which damages
economy
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the economy
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.In
this
,case
society
has to spend more money on health insurance and retirement boxes rather than creating more opportunities.
overall
each country has to invest in inviting
people
to have children and avoid solitude because it certainly put
society
at risk.
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