Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that all genders should have the same proportion of attendance at higher education
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by
admissions
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.
While
I understand the main point behind
this
argument, I completely disagree with the given statement.
Firstly
, applying
this
kind of rule is undoubtedly against
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fundamental human rights. From the Magna Carta statement to
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modern law mechanics, education is simply defined as a basic human right without regard for gender or race.
Secondly
,
although
this
approach may
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a
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way of positive discrimination
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women’s rights,
this
could be detrimental in
further
consequences among society
as well as
teenegers
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teenagers
who wish to apply
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universities. If
this
method would be applied and some
successfull
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high
school
graduates have not been selected by university authorities,
this
could cause a lack of motivation and unclear future goals
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this
unfair selection method.
Finally
,
this
admission way does not really seems applicable in terms of assessment
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criteria
and
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over
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the workload of admission officers they might face in the process. Trying to give the same chance for both genders
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all educational levels is
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. In
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Turkey’s education system, possible problems can occur starting from the primary
school
level
and not least to the high
school
level
. Taking consideration of gender inequality at
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educational
level
could be an unrealistic and unnatural approach
besides
there are major problems even at primary
school
levels.
For example
, in the eastern part of Turkey, in most of the rural areas, teenage girls are hardly attending to
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schools
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. In my opinion, if we are keen to solve gender and opportunity equality in
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, measures can be taken all the way
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starting from the bottom of the educational pyramid. In conclusion, I completely disagree that giving the same chance to both genders in university admissions despite the main motivation of
this
given statement.
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  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
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