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Some people believe that life in a big city is difficult while others say that it is more convenient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in big cities?

#people #life #city #cities
Nowadays,
while
 some people affirm that huge
metropolities
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metropolises
metropolis
 offer facilities which worth
to live
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 there, others relate
this
 idea
with
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to
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 the
challeges
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challenges
 faced by the locals.
However
, there are both pros and cons
of
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to
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 making a big city
as
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home. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some of the reasons why moving to the main
centers
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centres
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 are so popular and some of the negatives to be overcome.
To begin
 with, an
advantange
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advantage
 of living in a big city is the great
amount
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 of jobs
spreaded
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spread
 over different sites, fields and shifts
,.
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 What I mean by
this
 is
that is
 easier to
to
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choose which work conditions
suits
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 best on you.
By
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this
 way, workers can manage their lives in a flexible
away
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way
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. Turning to the other side of the argument,
crowed
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crowded
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 centres are usually busy, which is a problem. The time spent in the traffic jam and long lines
,
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 turns
people
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routine
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 hard to manage.
This
 often leads to delays in daily tasks. All things considered, living in
megalopolies
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megalopolises
megalopolis
 is never easy. You need to weigh up the pros of the better job offers, and the cons of the busy routine. Personally, I believe the benefits in terms of lifestyle eventually outweigh any drawbacks.
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