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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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It is often believed that the reach of technological advancements has been one of the reasons for creating a gap between
people
 with different classes of
income
while
 others assert that
technology
 is bringing the rich and poor
people
 together.
This
 essay shall discuss both views. In my opinion, I believe
technology
 is creating differences between
people
 with higher
income
 and lower
income
.
Technology
 has provided many opportunities for the inclusion of poor
people
 in
income
-earning activities. Various job platforms have allowed unemployed
people
 to know the employment available and grab the opportunities.
For instance
, there are applications where
people
 can hire housemaids, which helps housewives to earn a certain level of
income
.
In addition
, awareness programs and training are run by different organizations.
Also
, organizations are providing donations and their products as a social responsibility to encourage the use of
technology
. There is a company in India which is providing convertible wheelchairs to specially-abled groups of
people
 which can be used for transportation.
This
 has allowed them to get involved in money-generating activities like the delivery of food. On the other side, the cost of
technology
 is quite higher which may not be affordable for
people
 with a low scale of earning. The major focus of poor
people
 is on basic needs and there is a certain class of
people
 who depend on earning a single day to
fulfill
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 their needs on
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 day. In the context of Nepal, the price of a smartphone starts from Rs. 10,000 which may not be affordable.
Moreover
, in
this
 materialistic world, the success and hierarchy of individuals are compared based on material possession. The possession of cars, costly gadgets, and so on is considered rich. It is observed that students with
such
 belongings are forming a group and bullying those who do not have one. In conclusion, though technological developments have brought innovations making the life of
people
 easier and allowing platforms to earn money, other factors associated
such
 as price and impression of
people
 have been contributing to creating differences. The companies involved should focus on how all groups of
people
 could be involved.
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