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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
#bar #show #hours #teacher #schools #four #countries
The bar charts below give the key attention
on
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 teaching staff members who have spent various
hours
 in
in
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diverse
academy
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academies
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 in different nations in the
year
 2001. Looking from an
overall
 all perspective,
a
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 ratio of United States of
America's
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America
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 tutors hit the highest point
all
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in all
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 the schools, whilst Japan's educators
were
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spent moderate
hours
. The bar chart mainly focuses on primary, lower secondary and upper secondary schools. It is conspicuous that
a
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 total proportion of
instructor's
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instructors
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were
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 the highest
hours
, approximately 650, 1500 and 1150 in the United States of America throughout the
year
. Among
from
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these schools, upper secondary school was
the
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superior. The total number of Spain and Iceland tutors
were
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 the second highest
school
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 of the
year
, which
were
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accounted for nearly 650, 800,
900
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and 900
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, out of which primary and secondary teacher’s
hours
 moderately declined by 70 and 200 correspondingly.The other country was not so popular
in
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whole
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the whole
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year
, which
were
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 responsible for roughly 600-700
hours
. It is predicted that
upper
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the upper
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 secondary academy is the supreme academy, where tutors have willing to
spent
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 most of
the
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 time.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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