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Some people believe that governments should pay full course fees for students who want to study in universities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #governments #course #fees #students #study #universities
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Of all the concerns that
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 often have, one of the most persistent is whether they can afford to pay for their full course fees on their own. Some argue that they should receive financial support from the government, and I personally think that there is little to disagree with
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 observation. Learners who are able to attend university have gained specialized knowledge and enough maturity to be responsible for their lives. They must wisely calculate their expenses and save the money needed to invest in their
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.
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 not only helps them achieve a strong academic performance but
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 gains them necessary life skills
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 as budgeting, time management and the ability to balance a part-time job with studies.
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, investing in their learning is essential for
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 to sustain their lives after graduation. Another reason to argue that
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' tuition fees should be paid by the government is not appropriate. Learning is the student's responsibility, not the government's burden. In some developed and developing countries,
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 have the right to go to school without paying for any fee from kindergarten to high school. After these levels, they have a choice of their major in university. They are over eighteen, so they should be responsible for paying for their own
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. In conclusion, I disagree with the idea that governments should pay full course fees for
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 who want to study at universities.
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 is because
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 are mature enough to be responsible for their own
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 and the benefits they gain from paying for it. Investing in their
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 is a necessary step for
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 to sustain their lives after graduation and gain the necessary skills for their future careers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • University tuition
  • Public good
  • Economic growth
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Merit-based scholarships
  • Need-based grants
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Educational equity
  • Income-contingent loans
  • Graduate tax
  • Financial aid
  • Student loans
  • Subsidize
  • Taxpayer funding
  • Underappreciation
  • Workforce development
  • Access to education
  • Higher learning institutions
  • Government expenditure
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