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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#person #decision #support
Nowadays, in many ,society some
people
 can’t make a
decision
 alone. Some other strongly believe everyone must get a
decision
 alone eventually
although
 in general humans need advice additional in the
last
 century. We’ll discuss both points of
this
 view in the following statements
also
 I’ll say my opinion about
this
 issue. First of all, some
people
 don’t help from their families and relatives and think about their
decision
 alone, because of that they believe any
people
 recognize his or her self better than anyone differently
moreover
this
 recognition of any mind
such
 as their training and social conditions limited any human for getting a
decision
 that actually acceptable for other.
On the other hand
, someone
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by
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regarding her or his spiritual structure is introverted
also
 might have embraced making a
decision
 by getting a colleague that should be involved with one friend who has familiar with the situation of her or his friend
that
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which
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 helps to make a
decision
 for someone. First of all, some professional
people
 in their major said in a world with unfamiliar conditions and complicated situations any human
for
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to
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 making a
decision
 that will riches in a good conclusion in future, must be getting advice from specialists. In conclusion, by regard human behaviour in complicated circumstances and social conditions any
decision
 needs to identification about their situation and thoughts approximately
correct
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thus
 one person can’t make a
decision
 alone.In my ,opinion because of the investigation that I study about
this
 issue
wich
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which
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 was published in a famous journal in July of 2021, I believe making alone a
decision
 is a false
decision
.
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