Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Our world is changing tremendously,
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are in look
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great innovations with the help of
data
and the most
powerfull
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powerful
and valuable source is
data
. I strongly agree that
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should be easily available to anyone. here,
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information
to each and
everyone
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.
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,
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the key to anything from professional to personnel, In today's world we could find, discover or track anything and everything through modern innovation technologies using A.I
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analyse and
interprets
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data
easily.
For instance
, Google
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SEO showcases the results of whatever we search
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a span of seconds.
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, with respect to the economic point of view
data
is
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necessary
to gain
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with
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investors who invest their funds in companies by thoroughly
studing
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studying
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history and all the details related to the company
moreover
information
linked with health should be available to everyone. To exemplify, when the world was facing covid pandemic countries failed to release some confidential files linked with the
orgin
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origin
of
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this
gave
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ride
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to a difficult situation.
However
, some confidential
information
needs to be given only limited access to top government officials and those
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pointing to national security needs to be taken care but apart from
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these
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every individual has the right to know. In conclusion, every individual has the right to avail
informations
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and get help through
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to
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act.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • accelerates progress
  • innovative discoveries
  • transparency
  • open access
  • verify results
  • fraudulent
  • ethical practices
  • consumer trust
  • potential risk
  • misuse
  • sensitive information
  • genetic data
  • defense-related technologies
  • proprietary information
  • trade secrets
  • competitive edge
  • value
  • investment of time and resources
  • compensation
  • disincentivize
  • recoup costs
  • balanced approach
  • policies and agreements
  • sensitive data
  • fair compensation
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