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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or this agree with this statement?

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contemporary
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 world,
public
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 transportation system plays
extremely
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 significant role in
the
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government policy. Some believe that the high proportions of
this
 budget have to be divided equally by the regimen. I partly agree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate spending regarding transportation policy based on my point of view and support it with examples as well.
To begin
 with, each
of
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vehicle has certain virtues.
While
 the only passenger is not transported via railways by
the
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trains,
also
 mean of trams is conveyed distinctive manufactured products or industrial materials in
intrastare
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intrastate
 commerce or outland.
Therefore
economical
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 significance of the railways is not ignored. At the same time, most individuals' interests are increasing to travel with hyperloop trains. Because most people including me are keen on to spend their time on vehicle and save money as much as possible.
Furthermore
, in recent years, cars and motorbikes have been considerably increasing in cities. There are relatively more traffic accidents than previous two decades.The government is obliged to rise
expenditure
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of
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on
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 building
of
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the new railway system. On the flip side, people who drive a personal vehicle can move
more
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a more
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independent
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by mean
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mean
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means
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of
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off
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the road
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road ways
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roadways
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. Because railways
is
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 planned
in
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the
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 certain map and destination.
However
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 citizens can travel wherever they want via their cars. That's why the cabinet hasn't
to pay
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 less attention to growing roads.
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