IN MANY COUNTRIES, THE NUMBER OF ANIMALS AND PLANTS ARE DECLINING. WHY DO YOU THINK IT IS HAPPENING? HOW TO SOLVE THE ISSUE?

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

182 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

biodiversity
ecosystem
urbanization
deforestation
agricultural expansion
pollution control
greenhouse gas emissions
renewable energy
sustainable practices
overexploitation
invasive species
conservation
quarantine measures
eradication programs
public awareness campaigns
habitat destruction
climate change
natural habitats
species decline

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IN MANY COUNTRIES, THE NUMBER OF ANIMALS AND PLANTS ARE DECLINING. WHY DO YOU THINK IT IS HAPPENING? HOW TO SOLVE THE ISSUE?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.

Adult youths are often called up for working development of communities. Some people say that they should be paid other say that they should not be pair. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Air travel is cheap these days, allowing ordinary people to travel further. Some people say that air fare should be increased because this leads to environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.