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The percentage of people using various mobile phone features. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the
usage
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 of the most common
cell
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 phone features during 2006, 2008, and 2010 by the percentage of
usage
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 for each one.
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it is clear that
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 making calls is the main reason to buy and use
cell
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phones
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 in the 4-year period.
Although
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 internet surfing saw a sharp increase, all mobile phone
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 increased from 2006 to 2010. Making calls is the main
usage
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 in 2006 and 2008 with 100
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, in 2010, it decreased by just one
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 and still remains the first
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 of
cell
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phones
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. Send and receive messages and take photos by 73 and 66
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 of popularity in 2006 increased to 79 and 76
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 in 2010, respectively, and remained in second and third rank like 4 years before.
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, searching the internet and recording videos had no data in 2006,
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, four years later about three-fourths of people used their
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 for surfing the net and just more than one-third of users record videos with their
cell
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phones
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. Using mobiles for playing games and music
also
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 become more popular in
this
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 period of time and reached 41 and 26
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, respectively.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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