Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 150 words.

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As a member of
the
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society, we have equal rights,
independence
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and independence
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to do and choose to earn
money
, but
the
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wealth is not equally going in
this
capitalized world. Rich
people
have more alternatives than poor
people
as they have enough wealth to spend on anything. So, millionaires have more opportunities to give
a
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support
who needs their help. I suppose that becoming a wealthy person is
a
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best way to
support
others
.
Firstly
, businessmen can help
for
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charity services by dividing a part of their profit and it will increase the reputation of the company
also
.
Moreover
, we can feel
the
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self satisfaction
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by engaging
actively
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to improve the quality of someone’s life.
For instance
, Rich
people
can give gifts and financial
support
for
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child
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in orphanage
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orphanage
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and they can feel happy by watching how children enjoy
with
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gifts and their feedback which can’t buy
us
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. Most
of
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religious
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leaders
also
try to promote the positive effects of giving something
for
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others
among
the
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prosperous men.
However
, if we haven’t
money
, we have opportunities to help
people
who need our courage.
For example
, education
expert
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experts
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have
knowledge
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the knowledge
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and they can give it to the students who
haven’t
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do haven’t
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enough facilities and live in remote areas by using correspondence education, though they haven’t time and
money
to travel
such
a long distance.
Furthermore
,
money
is not the only way to
support
people
who suffer from poverty or illness.
According to
the Lord Buddha, the only wealth that we can earn merits
by
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helping
others
. We can offer our blood ,
though
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whether
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we are poor or rich and it doesn’t need
money
.
To sum up
, I can conclude that currency is not the only way that we can help
others
and, eventually, I believe that, if we think widely we have more options for giving
support
for
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people
.
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