Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 150 words.

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As a member of

the

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society, we have equal rights,

independence

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and independence

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to do and choose to earn

money

, but

the

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wealth is not equally going in

this

capitalized world. Rich

people

have more alternatives than poor

people

as they have enough wealth to spend on anything. So, millionaires have more opportunities to give

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support

who needs their help. I suppose that becoming a wealthy person is

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best way to

support

others

Firstly

, businessmen can help

for

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charity services by dividing a part of their profit and it will increase the reputation of the company

also

Moreover

, we can feel

the

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self satisfaction

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self-satisfaction

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by engaging

actively

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activities

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to improve the quality of someone’s life.

For instance

, Rich

people

can give gifts and financial

support

for

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child

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in orphanage

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orphanage

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orphanages

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and they can feel happy by watching how children enjoy

with

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gifts and their feedback which can’t buy

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them

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. Most

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religious

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the religious

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leaders

also

try to promote the positive effects of giving something

for

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others

among

the

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prosperous men.

However

, if we haven’t

money

, we have opportunities to help

people

who need our courage.

For example

, education

expert

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experts

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have

knowledge

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the knowledge

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and they can give it to the students who

haven’t

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do haven’t

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enough facilities and live in remote areas by using correspondence education, though they haven’t time and

money

to travel

such

a long distance.

Furthermore

money

is not the only way to

support

people

who suffer from poverty or illness.

According to

the Lord Buddha, the only wealth that we can earn merits

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helping

others

. We can offer our blood ,

though

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whether

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we are poor or rich and it doesn’t need

money

To sum up

, I can conclude that currency is not the only way that we can help

others

and, eventually, I believe that, if we think widely we have more options for giving

support

for

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people

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