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Title: More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

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The phenomenon of younger folk preferring to study at oversea colleges and universities has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
 issue in question may be, it seems to me that the advantages of studying far away from your home country would overcome the drawbacks. Regarding the disadvantages of receiving education at foreign colleges and universities, probably the most negative effect is that you have to adopt a completely new environment which includes language, culture, food, etc... Many people cannot bear and adopt the new change. So, they give up during the semester and get back to their country.
For example
, some students cannot meet new friends because they cannot speak well with the new language.
This
 in turn makes them cannot feel the joy of learning abroad like others...
As a result
, they choose to go home and find their friends and family. Despite the aforementioned disadvantages of learning abroad, I still believe that its benefits can outweigh the drawbacks for several reasons. Probably the most significant one is that learning abroad would broaden our horizons and make us more independent. To illustrate
this
 point of view, it is a valuable opportunity for students to expose
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totally different culture in order to know that the world is huge. There are a lot of different ways to live. After that, they would establish their personal philosophy and living skills basic on their experience.
Therefore
, many students want to study abroad. Under
this
 line of thinking,
although
 there are many challenges when you are living overseas alone, the experience that they earn from the schooling journey is much essential to their future as a treasure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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