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Some people think that the media (newspapers ) have the right to publish details of people's private lives, while other think it should be controlled. discuss both views.

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The technology has allowed the rapid exposure of public figures' privacy. Anybody can become a paparazzi if they have celebrities around and a smartphone on hand with which they can take multiple photos and post them on the internet in a matter of seconds.
While
 some
people
 believe that it is fair, others argue that the content of the publication should be filtered.
This
 essay will support each opinion. Celebrities are constantly in the public eye and
this
 is a positive thing because of the nature of their work. Professionals
such
 as actors, singers and athletes rely not only on their talent but
also
 on their image to make money. If a singer's life affairs are constantly in the press,
for example
, his or her songs tend to sell more and reach the top of the radio charts.
Therefore
, the more popular a famous person is, the wealthier they become.
However
, Being involved in gossip can result in negative outcomes. Sometimes, exploiting and creating rumours about
people
's intimate lives only make newspapers and magazines richer
while
 personally and financially damaging celebrities' lives.
For instance
, the case of prince Harry who, trying to avoid the English tabloids' chase, resigned from his royal duties so that he could have a peaceful life with his wife Megan and their children.
For
this
 reason, the media should be prevented from publishing damaging and misleading information about
people
. As argued above, being in the press has positive and negative aspects.
This
 essay discussed both views and concluded that
people
 should be protected against bad publicity because it could profoundly impact their careers and personal life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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