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People have different ways of escaping stress and difficult of modern life. Some read, some exercise, others work in their gardens. What do you think are the reasons for stress? What are the best ways of reducing stress?

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In
this
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 perpetually transforming epoch. Mental
stress
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 has been increasing among
people
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 around the world.
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, few
individuals
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 have
a different ways
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different ways
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 to overcome their
stress
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 and the burden of modern well-being. Few read, some does exercise and
other
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others
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 prefer to do work in their gardens. I have discussed the reasons and
way
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ways
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 to reduce
stress
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 in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with the side of reasons for
this
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 phenomenon, the first and foremost is masses concentrate more
in
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on
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 their work rather than
health
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.
In addition
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, Nowadays,mankind only
want
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wants
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 to earn
money
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 bunch of
money
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 and
due to
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this
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, they do hard work without any Focus on
health
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 because of
this
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, many
people
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 suffer from less sleep and mental
stress
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.
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,
according to
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 the World
Health
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 Organization, most
of
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people
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the people
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 are suffering from high
stress
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 and low thinking power
due to
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 a high workload.
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,
individuals
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 are not
wants
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want
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 to so exercise and only want to earn
money
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 and
due to
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this
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, they do not concentrate
in
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on
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 their
health
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 and eat fast food since to Hectique life. So, they gain
obesity
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 and suffer from many diseases.
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 as.diabetes, high super level and low strength bone. Now, taking into account of measure side of
this
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 trend,
firstly
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, the
government
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 should concentrate more
in
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on
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people
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's
health
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 rather than politics.
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, if
government
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 establish some gardens in big cities which have every type of exercise equipment. So, many men and women can use it and
able
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are able
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 to keep themself fit.
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,
due to
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 putting equipment in
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the park
a park
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park
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parks
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by
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Indian authorities, the ratio of
people
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's I'll
health
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 has decreased by 50
percentage
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per cent
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.
Therefore
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, many
individuals
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 can be fit with aid from the
government
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. In conclusion,
due to
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greediness
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the greediness
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 of
people
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 earning ,
money
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 will their
health
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. on the other
hands
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hand
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,
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government
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the government
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 should add
individuals
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 to keep their bodies feet.
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