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During our careers, we work with many different kinds of people. All of them have unique characteristics and personality traits. In your opinion, which of the following is the most important characteristic of a coworker? • a serious attitude regarding their work obligations • a willingness to learn new things • the ability to make other people laugh

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 partners . As we know Evey people have distinctive skills which they learn from them.
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 attitude gives a huge bringing to focus their performance . For, example, multi National companies always find a concentrative
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 because they always achieve potential in their
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 discipline is the biggest factor
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 every field .
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, in life opportunities
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 learn many basic things from others. From the beginning of life individuals learn every single thing from their parents and after
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 they learn from their working staff, seniors and forecasts.
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, understanding builds from learning as it is undeniable that new ideas and building the structure
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 from learning from others. It helps to maintain personality and professionally to people and change the behaviour strength towards social abilities.
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, there are several factors that
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increased in workspaces
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 . So enjoyment is of vital importance in working hours . For, instance , many companies solve
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laughter clubs in offices .
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, laughing
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great value in
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 in society because it
remove
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stress , and
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 to engage the enjoyment in
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 so they build
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 easily. In conclusion, these simple factors have
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 potential to manage the partnership with the
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. Laughter, seriousness, and enhanced new things provide great value in
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 opportunities.
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