Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subject, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

In today's perpetually transforming epoch.
Children
are concentrating more on education rather than other
activities
.
However
, few individuals opened that
music
,
Art
and
Drama
are as vital as
another
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other
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academic
subject
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, mostly at starting school. I fully agree with the above Nation and explain with
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extent in the first coming paragraphs. To commence with the agreement site of
this
phenomenon, the first and foremost is every child
not
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have the same abilities.
In addition
,
total
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starting
age
of
children
they
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learn everything from surrounding ambition and to the parents. So, they learn many other things except
Science
and Maths
such
as
music
Art
and
Drama
and
due to
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that, they can able to keep relax in their life and it for bright future. If
they
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not able to understand
science
and maths through the talent of
Art
and
Drama
, they can able to build their career.
For instance
, Amitabh Bachchan started
drama
in the movie starting to
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only
age
and
due to
this
, now he is one of the
famous
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actors in the world and
earn
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of money
to
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the
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drama
.
Secondly
,other
activities
aid juveniles to concentrate on the main subject .
such
as .maths ,social
science
and
Science
.
In other words
, listening to
music
playing games and doing
art
can help
children
to fill relaxed and feel more comfortable with
study
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studying
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along with
main
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subjects. If they only learn subjectively they can suffer from anxiety and mental stress because they
not
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do not
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have any other
activities
which
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regional their well-being in starting gauge and it
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detrimental consequences . Long
time
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headache ,only claver
in
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main
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subject and
not
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am not
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able to connect socially.
Therefore
, for the bright future of
children
music
art
and acting at starting
age
is good for them. In conclusion, I fully agree with the statement that other
activities
can add miners to make a bright future and keep
relaxed
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them relaxed
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at their starting
age
.
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