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Nowadays, many students live their family while others go to another city to study at the University. What are the advantages and disadvantages

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These days, more
students
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 prefer to
study
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in
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 International University
that is
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 why they are moving to other cities.
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,
students
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 have lots of
opportunites
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opportunities
for
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to
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study
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abroad. But some
students
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 prefer to
study
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 with family in
own
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their own
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 city. It has its benefits and drawbacks.
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 will be considered about its with
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. On the one hand, let us discuss
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the
students
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 who live with their families. There is no doubt that those children who
lives
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 with families get
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complete care from their parents.
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, If they live with their family, parents will find time to spend with their children.
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, It is a good effect
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 their education because If they live with family, they will
can
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concentrate
during
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the
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study
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.
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, there were negative aspects in
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 situation
also
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,
while
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 the children cannot take decisions on their own and face a multitude of problems in future.
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 stated that 90% of the trainees in
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developing countries lack self-confidence and problem-solving skills, which was not seen in the developed nations. On the other
hands
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,
students
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 who go to other cities for their higher studies can explore a lot and
they
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try to socialize with new people. With their experience, they can develop their own skills and think in all aspects.
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, in the recent day, a large number of
students
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 prefer to
study
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 in
America
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 countries to continue their higher studies.
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,
student
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students
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 are doing
part time
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 jobs after their
study
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.
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 not only helps to develop their skills
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 but
also
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teach
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 them the value of money
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the
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 young age.
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,
these
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during
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study
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an
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and
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 abroad they may suffer
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 home fit less,
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, it made affects their mental health in
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 negative way. In the long- term those
students
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 are likely to be
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 are even depressed.  In conclusion,
although
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study
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an
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abroud
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abroad
 for
students
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 may have so are drawbacks. I would
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pretence
, 
this
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 trend
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encourage
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 to
partisipate
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participate
 to go another city
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because
 they will be
browden
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broaden
brown
 horizon.
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