Some people claim that many things that children are taught at school are a waste of time. Other people argue that everything that children study at school is useful at sometime. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

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a
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parent
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, our priority is to give our
children
the best education that they can learn from school in order for them to have a good life.
However
, some issues are rising these days
that
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children
are being stressed out too much at school
due to
too much studying.
Children
are being focused on
subjects
that are not important. It came to arguments too that most of the
subjects
that
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taught in school
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just a waste of time. At a certain point, we would be thinking that those
subjects
are not beneficial for our
children
but as they grew up these
subjects
are needed as
a
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foundations
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in order for them to
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certain
subjects
. They will need these
subjects
to solve problems,
issues
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and issues
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and come up with a solution. These
subjects
will be their guides to
create
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solutions for their
reasearch
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research
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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