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A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old building and building new ones. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In
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contemporary ,era there is a heated argument over the issue that more
bill
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is
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being
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 spent on the renovation of ancient
goods
.A majority of society favours
that
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repairing
of
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old ownership capital should be spent on distorted ancient structures and
building
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buildings
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.Others ,go
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opposite to it.I fully accord with
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the
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statement.I will discuss the logical conclusion in the upcoming paragraph. There is adequate evidence of view which are substantial.The first and foremost one is repairing
old
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an old
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 property is not a safe location.There are a lot of chances to get damaged again it is not safe from natural disasters
as
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 earthquakes, floods etc.Adding more to it nowadays individuals are very stingy to spend
bill
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bills
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 on houses or
goods
 of new making
goods
 they like renovating the old
equity
.,some people think that spending
wage
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 on new ownership is madness.,
Consequently
 even the renovation of
goods
 will easily spoil earlier and
also
 be a waste of time and payment. Probing ahead in
this
 modern era most of the places were constructed as new building
equity
.
Besides
 that nowadays architecture and engineering are well-trained and educated they make new
equity
 in modern style and
fully
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are fully
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 safe from all-natural calamities.
Although
 making a new building
also
 takes less consumption of land
as well as
it
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consumes less time and salary.Whilst governments
also
 should have to take strict action on
old
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the old
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 property and they have to make new
equity
 with modern design at an affordable price. To recapitulate,
according to
 my opinion new style
ownership
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of ownership
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are
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stronger and much better
instead
 of
old
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the old
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goods
.Admittedly individuals live a good life and feel more protected in new property.
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