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Some people think that Information technologies have more disadvantages than advatages. To what extent do you agree?

There is no doubt that education and the learning
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has
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 changed since the introduction of
computers
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: The search for information has become easier and
amusing
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, and connectivity has expedited
the
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data availability. Though expert systems have made
computers
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 more intelligent, they have not yet become a substitute
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the
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human
interaction
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 in the learning
process
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. In my opinion what can be expected is a change
of
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 the
teachers’
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teacher’s
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 role, but not their disappearance from the classroom. Nobody can argue that the acquisition of knowledge is more fun and easier with
computers
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. The mere activity of touching and exploring
this
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 device constitutes an enjoyable task for a child.
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, accompanied by
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 relaxing attitude and software interactivity, usually contributes to a better grasping of new knowledge. At a higher educational
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 the availability of digital books, simulators and other academic materials
provide
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 the student with an
ever accessible
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 source of information, that
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 would not be at hand. But,
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 the increasing complexity and
behavior
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 of intelligent software, which is usually embedded in the academic digital material, the need for human
interaction
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 in the learning
process
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 will always be present, at least in the foreseeable future. There is
the
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 necessity for a human being to be able to determine what the
specifics
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 needs of each individual are. The expertise of a teacher in how to explain and adapt complex concepts to different individuals can hardly be mimicked by a computer, no matter how sophisticated its software is. As
computers
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 are becoming a common tool for teaching, teachers should be more aware of their role as guides in the acquisition of knowledge rather than transmitters of facts. They have to be
open minded
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 to the changes that are taking
places
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, keep updated and serve as problem solvers in the learning
process
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,
thus
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 allowing students to discover the fact for themselves. To summarize, in my personal view, teachers play and will continue to play an important role in the classroom, especially at the primary level. No matter how complex
computers
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 become, there will be no replacement for
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human
interaction
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, but in the way
haw
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how
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this
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interaction
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 takes place.

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