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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the majority of education is
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changing
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such
 as schools and universities.
Besides
, many teachers are developing and more educated in their field.
However
, some tutors consider that international student interchange would be helpful for all adolescent school students.
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 my part, I will discuss
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this
 exchange.
To begin
 with interchange, it is not
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juvenile
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. It can be
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 schools
,
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 because in these times
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educational
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have
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 not good teaching. Many teenagers go to a variety of courses after school and
therefore
 in colleges bad education.
In addition
, because of
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 the majority of
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an adolescent
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adolescent
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 do not go to
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institution
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 and
thus
 in many colleges issues arise.
For instance
, pupils become less social with classmates and do not get
along with
 teachers and
therefore
 there are shortcomings in academies.
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, in
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 tutors can not explain the lesson
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juvenile
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 and
thus
 some educators think that international
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 can explain
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a high standard for all young
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. I guess that it leads to disadvantages. After
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 old educators know more information and
more
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 educated than global undergraduates. In conclusion, in my
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 educators should
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 of learning and continue their job in college. Global scholars can open their personal
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,
such
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for
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young
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a young
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person
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. It can be
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 both parties.
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 scholars because of education can learn everything and improve their knowledge to in the future they can work in exotic academies. Tutors must
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explain
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 their adolescents in order to they can comprehend, what instructor
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thus
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