The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The chart demonstrates the amount of money spent on five various consumer commodities (
cars
, computers, books, perfume, and cameras) in two nations (
France
, and the United Kingdom) in the year 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling.
Overall
, the UK spent the most wealth on consumer goods than
France
in the period given. Both the
British
and French spent the highest amount of money on
cars
and the least amount on perfume consumers. In terms of
cars
, the
British
spent more expenditure on
cars
consumers, about £450,000 on
this
as opposed to the French at only £400, 000.
Similarly
,
British
expenditure was higher on books than the French (roughly £400,000 and exactly £400,000 correspondingly). In the UK, the camera buyers shoot a peak at approximately £350,000 and were over half of the French (£150,000).
On the other hand
, the remaining part of the money was spent more on
France
. About £370,000 in
France
which was slightly less in the UK at exactly £350,000. The other purchasers were not so popular throughout the whole year and were responsible for £140,000 - £200,000.
To conclude
, it is predicted that consumer goods are the
British
dominant.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, france, british with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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