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Nowadays a person has to be talented to become famous on the Internet. Discuss this view and give your opinion.

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These days,
people
 like to be
a
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viral
person
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 on worldwide networks.But what is the most effective way to become a famous
person
 on the internet?
However
 many
people
 believe that a gifted mind is compulsory to become famous. I completely agree and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with examples. First of all,
people
 always need to have creative sensibility.
for example
. creativity can be on entertainment, education or design topics. If someone knows how to show or sell unique ideas that are most needed in the modern world,
then
 he/she will be a famous guy.
Secondly
, why I agree with
this
 because gaining so much knowledge can be made someone to be a celebrity
person
.A good illustration of
this
 is that
people
 study hard on a particular subject
such
 as technology, business, writer and become a millionaire
then
people
 will follow their activities. And
also
 it can be made him so popular. But the main thing,
people
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 needed to learn a massive amount of books.
On the other hand
, popularity can not hold for everlasting. It stays for a limited time. To be more precise.
people
 like to see new things
every
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 time, so they keep them for an abridged duration.
As a result
, fame can be lost.
In addition
, sometimes more popularity brings problems. Though it may be handled smoothly, the solution could be high cost. In conclusion,
although
 it is a common belief that fame doesn't come without having something.I personally think, being a well-known
person
 has to be multi-talented.
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