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Some people prefer to live in a big city. Others think it is better to live in a small town. Discuss both views.

Nowadays, the vast majority of
people
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 are able to choose where they would like to live: in the capital or another big
city
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 or in the
countryside
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.
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 a lot of them prefer the first one because of more opportunities, there is an increasing trend of
people
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 who wish to live in a small town, mostly
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 an easier life.
This
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 essay will discuss both opinions and try to explain why the idea of living in the
countryside
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 is becoming more and more popular. It is clear why large cities are so attractive to citizens: there are at least developed infrastructure, enough jobs and regular events. Historically, if any person is looking for the best for them in terms of improving their prosperity, he or she moves to a big
city
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.
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, if we look at the population of small towns in Altay, Russia, where I was born, there is a significant drop in the number of citizens,
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 the population of the capital of the region consistently grows. But
on the other hand
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, the big
city
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 is full of stress.
People
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 living in a
city
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 should be adaptive to permanent changes around them
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 as accidents, renovations or frequent events.
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, the life of a capital resident can be rather expensive.
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, the price of identical housing between a
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 and a
countryside
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 can be different by 3-5 times
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 food and other needs in some cases. So,
people
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 avoiding a tense environment or wishing to spend less money can choose a life on the periphery of a region. In conclusion, every person can decide where he or she will live based on their personality and needs. Large cities are fit for active
people
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 wishing to increase their income, but at the same time,
people
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 suffering from urban rush and high expending should look at the
countryside
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 option.

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task achievement
Make sure to provide more examples to support your points throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words to connect ideas in your paragraphs better.
coherence and cohesion
Consider simplifying your sentences for better clarity and understanding.
task achievement
The introduction clearly states the topic and outlines both views well.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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