Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Environmental issues include quite a mixed variety of concerns. Yet, one of the most hazardous
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endangered plants and animal species.
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, some people believe that there are other necessities.
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about
wild-life
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and nature since
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, and quite an enormous
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have been produced recently. Indeed,
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adverse feature of a certain type
animal
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extinction, or
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a
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type of tree is related to land
degredation
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degradation
,
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, inhibiting the
population
of wolfs in Australian mountains could lead to long-lasting droughts and
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. In turn, deteriorations caused by mentioned disasters affect people’s diet by damaging agriculture
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and causing famines.
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, a balanced
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determines how
wild-life
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, nature and people survive. So, there is no chance to preserve
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humanity
humidity
without recognizing
this
vital issue. Nowadays, investigations argue about some other concerns produced by
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era.
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, the fact that half of the world
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in cities begs the problem of
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population
. As a matter of fact, natural resources are limited
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and make
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by people fastly.
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, the water crisis is influenced by industrial activities’ overusing, and
also
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of agricultural decisions.
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,
over
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population
has affected the amount of green gases emissions, which contributes to global warming.
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are concerned about climate change strive to persuade governments to create essential changes in
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and control
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number
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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