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in the mordern world, people no longer need to use food or products from animals, such as medicine and clothing. Do you agree or disagree with that statement

#mordern #world #people #food #products #animals #medicine
the statement against the
consumption
 of
animals
 to produce foods, clothes and
medicine
 is going on for years. Some people find it depriving when taking
animals
 in experiments and developing processes of
medicine
. I find
this
 point of view slightly unjustifiable, and
this
 essay will contain ample evidence for that statement.
That is
 the fact that the use of
animals
 in production received little endorsement. People even find it brutally cruel when trying new medicines on
animals
.
However
, to be fair, experiencing new
medicine
 on a human being is unacceptable and unethical, plus it is too dangerous to directly try unfinished goods on the human body. It might cost them their part of the body, senses or even a life.
In particular
, thousands of samples must be checked before the
medicine
 is activated,
therefore
, experiencing new
medicine
 on an animal's body is needful.
Furthermore
, clothes made of wool, fur, etc have been worn for years. These are the types of clothes that have abilities to retain heat, which are in high demand in
a harsh, cold areas
Correct the article-noun agreement
harsh, cold areas
a harsh, cold area
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.
On the other hand
, by the
consumption
 of animal meats, especially the herbivores, the green of the Earth will not be eaten at all and left the Earth with massive stunted and withered culture.
Therefore
, the
consumption
 of meat
also
 plays a role in balancing biodiversity and ecosystems
Overall
,
although
 manufacturing
animals
 received very less endorsement, the completed solution has not been found, plus the
consumption
 of meat is
also
 necessary to
remainin
Correct your spelling
remain in
remain
a well-off environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • veganism
  • vegetarianism
  • ethical consumption
  • plant-based
  • synthetic materials
  • lab-grown
  • biotechnology
  • sustainability
  • animal welfare
  • tradition
  • economic sustainability
  • alternative medicine
  • cultural practices
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