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A zoo has no usful purpose Do yo agree or disagree with the following statement.

#zoo #usful #purpose #yo
Nowdays zoo is one of the most entertaining think in our live , and it helps to us with many thinks , but everething has minuses and pluses and my ESSAY is about advantages or disadvantages , likely i would give you very interesting facts about
zoos
also
 about
animals
 enviromental life . As we know our favourite
zoos
 are very popular in every single country and there are a lots of different wild or house
animals
 , it is easy to bring house
animals
 to zoo but you can not do it with wild
animals
 because we have to tame them bofore the cage, of course it is quite difficult to hold them in the same position. By the time the
zoos
 might be dangerous fot many people , thats is why a lots of trainers are dying in the local
zoos
 .
While
 some humans thinking that the
zoos
 are useless to us but others do not .
Zoos
 will be more better in the future but now they are awful .
However
 advantages of them are much
for instance
 : there are very interesting or enjoyable ,
zoos
 helps to our children with self developing new heights, improving our psychological sides and others .Actually there are many disadvantages
for example
 : scaring a lot , psychological bad sides ... Generally we all have our own opinoins about it someone says that
zoos
 are good but not all of us , in my point of view
zoos
 useful (for children) , but sometimes
zoos
 are good place to go with your ftriends, parents or girlfriend . So, we have to respect others opinions about it .
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