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Some people think that in order to continue improving the quality of high school education, students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers. Others, however, believe that this would result in the loss of discipline for teachers. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days, public debate has been going on over whether students should give their opinions or not about their teachers. I tend to believe that feedbacks improve significantly the educational level for the following reasons. Three main factors support the idea of
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 tutors. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that the
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, if the points to improve or
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, the teacher is a professional who depends
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 the same page, the learning achievement can be harmed. A third reason for my belief is that, even a person who has
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previous experience teaching needs
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feedback to set up his future goals in order
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. I admit that students sometimes confuse the idea of
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 their opinions
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considered
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 to a
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. In conclusion, I would argue that
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