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Some people believe that people have the right to university education, and government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that some
people
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 argue for the universal
right
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 to free
university
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education
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 I accept that
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 may suit many
people
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, I believe that it is impractical for governments to implement
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 a policy. On the one hand, it is not a practical dream to expect government authorities to fund higher
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 for those poorer sections of society, with low incomes and no savings. Without
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 funding,
people
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 from poor backgrounds would be unable to attend
university
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.
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, they would be excluded from many well-paid careers as engineers, doctors or lawyers. Social inequalities would be perpetuated and society as a whole would suffer
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 since those from low-income backgrounds would have no opportunity to develop their talents. The example of the US, during the struggle for civil rights for blacks and other minorities, shows the folly of denying equal educational opportunities
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 the poor.
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, there would be an enormous strain on government budgets if free access to
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 were a
right
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 for everyone. At its simplest,
people
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 from rich families can afford to pay tuition fees and for their own maintenance during their studies. Attendance at
university
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 is a privilege, not a
right
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, and if students can afford to pay for their studies, they should do so. In practical terms, governments cannot pay for the rich
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 the poor. Governments are faced with practical decisions on how to allocate their finite budgets, and funding free higher
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 for everyone would mean less money to spend on pressing issues
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 as health care or the environment. In conclusion, I disagree with the view that free higher
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 should be a
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 for everyone in society, and funding should be limited to those who
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 could not afford to attend
university
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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