In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

When the
product
emphasize
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with advertising and businesses nowadays,
this
leads to a positive impact
due to
attracting
people
to buy the
product
and cost-effective offered.
Initially
, many
people
promote their
products
by implementing the advertisement and, business
strategy
,
this
is because
attracting
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of attracting
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the
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buyers to purchase the goods.
That is
to say, the
product
that visualizing contain creative information and design, and
also
promoting
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on massive social media.
By using
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the
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professional designer service and content creator to give a unique
product
promotion are
the
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a
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good marketing
strategy
for
seller
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a seller
the seller
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who
want
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to reach
the
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number of customers.
For example
, involving
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professional
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professionals
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who
expertise
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in
product
designing, it will make the
products
visualizing being better than before like chocolate
product
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products
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that
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displayed by the creative poster and posted on Instagram
massivally
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massively
.
Furthermore
, the reason why
people
prefer emphasizing their
product
with a new
strategy
by
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offering the lowest cost of
products
, it is beneficial since they can maintain their customers to remain
buying
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to buy
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the goods. Implementing the discount on
products
in certain periods,
it
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causes the buyers not
move
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to
looking
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for another store to buy their daily basic needs
such
as food.
For instance
, because
of
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the chips
product
offered in Indomaret (supermarket) has
a more discounts
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a more discount
more discounts
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rather than
other
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in other
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stores,
people
tend to buy in one place
due to
finding
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store that
offering
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offers
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cost-effective prices.
To conclude
, albeit many
people
are not
common
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to
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apply
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use advertising and business
strategy
to promote their
product
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products
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, I believe that by
realize
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both of
strategy
,
this
result in increasing the number of
purchaser
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purchasers
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since offering
the
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unique
product
promoting
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promotion
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, and affordable price offering.
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  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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