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In modern times, people are more under stress more than ever. This has a negative impact on their well-being. State some of the causes and suggest possible solutions.

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Nowadays,
people
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 are suffered from more stress than they used to. Having a stable job is not only a standard for each
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 but
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 how others appreciate you,
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 it is one of the biggest problems for many humans.
Nevertheless
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, improving work skills can help them come over
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 challenge. On the one hand, high competition is one of
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 causes
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this
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 issue.
First,
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if they want a good position in a company, there are a lot of
people
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 who have the same desire,
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a
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plenty of
people
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 apply for
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.
Second,
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some appliers will not choose
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 work
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 high competition,
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 they are suitable with it.
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, there is numerous research
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 that
people
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 who want to apply
a
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job in a good company
such
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 as Google, Facebook or Apple,
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 position may
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 around 10 other competitors.
Moreover
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, applicants need to spend too much time
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preparing
interview
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the interview
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, which can cause them exhausted.
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, there are some useful solutions to deal with
this
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 pressure like advancing knowledge,
job
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 skills. Because, it helps interviewees have essential preparation, and
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not shock
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company's
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the company's
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 tests.
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, training
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help
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 them have a good performance in their career,
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 they can have higher salary and potential to have an important position.
For instance
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, if
people
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 are a student, they can concentrate on university lectures, and have good marks, which may a plus point in their curriculum vitae.
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, they can participate in class for soft skills,
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interview
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interviews
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.
To sum up
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, owning a stable career is the dream of many
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,
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 a
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 it has a large number of competitors.
Although
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, having a comfortable plan, and strategy is a good way to solve
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 problem.
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