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Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As far as
ones
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 can remember , teachers
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 always been the source of knowledge.
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Quran
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the Quran
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 -
Moslems'
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Muslims'
 holy book , the crew have the responsibilities of prophets because they light the road of wisdom for others.
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Therefore
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 people tend to be more grateful
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 their force in the past rather than now.
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I will elaborate in subsequent paragraphs. A lot of changes have occurred in the past century
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 the appearance of technology, and education is one of the major
eras
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 that tackled access to the internet.
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, students refer to the
world wide web
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World Wide Web
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 for acquiring information. With the help of online resources, the role of personnel is partly substituted.
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 , a lot of online educational materials are available on YouTube
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, which
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 everyone can easily use for their own purposes.They even point out the professor's mistake by searching through academic papers.
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, the amount of salary and drudgery of instructors are not aligned with each other.
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 , a scholar has to work for at least 8 hours at school, and assignments and feedback are
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 required
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a
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result
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, they
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 spend more time after class doing related tasks
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 means post-work hours , but the pay is low compared with other positions.
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, faculty undergo a lot of financial pressure. They might prefer to leave their work for another well-paid opportunity.
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, neither cadre nor students believe in education enhancement as they used to in the past. In other
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professors
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, professors
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 are not appreciated as before
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mentioned
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the mentioned
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 reasons above.
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while
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still the world calls for trainers ,every day more and more crew withdraw from their seats.

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task response
Say your view clearly at the start and keep to that answer.
coherence
Make one idea in each paragraph and use a simple topic line at the start of the paragraph.
coherence
Use easy link words to show order, like first, next, but, so, also.
task response
Back each idea with a short, simple example or fact.
coherence
Check grammar and spelling so the text is easy to read.
content
The essay tries to show a clear view about teachers and value.
content
The idea of tech change and pay issues is kept in the text.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Societal values
  • 2. Esteemed
  • 3. Pillars of the community
  • 4. Admiration
  • 5. Advancement of technology
  • 6. Acquiring knowledge
  • 7. Central role
  • 8. Diminished
  • 9. Infallible authority figures
  • 10. Eradicated
  • 11. Scrutiny
  • 12. Administrators
  • 13. Eroded
  • 14. Economic factors
  • 15. Salaries
  • 16. Cost of living
  • 17. Cultural shifts
  • 18. Career paths
  • 19. Media portrayal
  • 20. Public perception
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