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To some people studyng the past is the best way to help young people function well in the modern world. to what extend do you agree or disagree? what other measures could be effective in helping young people to function well in the modern world?

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A group of society ,
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 that searching into the past memorise is
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 method to guide new generation how to conduct their
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 correctly in the new world. I completely agree with
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 statement because
people
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 can study so many
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efficient
 lessons by rebuking their unsound
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 and mistakes in the past. There
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 a wide range of reasons why I believe that
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 is the best teacher in everybody's life. the first reason is connected to regrets. frequently ,
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 many wrong decisions in their daily
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 which is a regular treatment based on mankind's property; but the most
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 step is for
people
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 to blame themselves for these fumbles and learn how to replace unacceptable manner with
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admissible one. folk can
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 rely on experiences they gained during their lifetime
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divers
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 ages.
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 population pass through several experiments so by making efforts they can study sufficient
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 with the aim of creating
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 life.
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 , there are some useful strategies to benefit from the background and observe how effective it can be .citizenry should be
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taught
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 of denying them.
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 it is a common
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society to
people
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 escape from their errors. logically it would be better if
people
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 take responsibility for all things they do even the most terrible ones .by doing
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, they will know to revise problems
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 of wiping them up. another
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for
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their mistakes.
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them with
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target
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 to refine them and use them in their future
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. To sum
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up
, learning from
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history is the best solution for the team who are too young and don't have
enugh
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enough
experiences
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experience
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. errors can be
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rectified
 and used as the best lessons to carry out our
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also
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chilren
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children
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learnt to study their faults and modify them in order to wit beneficial
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.
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 would lead to a significant
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upheaval
 in society and even the country in
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 soon future.
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