To some people studyng the past is the best way to help young people function well in the modern world. to what extend do you agree or disagree? what other measures could be effective in helping young people to function well in the modern world?

A group of society ,
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that searching into the past memorise is
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method to guide new generation how to conduct their
lives
correctly in the new world. I completely agree with
this
statement because
people
can study so many
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lessons by rebuking their unsound
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and mistakes in the past. There
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a wide range of reasons why I believe that
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is the best teacher in everybody's life. the first reason is connected to regrets. frequently ,
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many wrong decisions in their daily
lives
which is a regular treatment based on mankind's property; but the most
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step is for
people
to blame themselves for these fumbles and learn how to replace unacceptable manner with
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admissible one. folk can
also
rely on experiences they gained during their lifetime
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ages.
for
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population pass through several experiments so by making efforts they can study sufficient
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with the aim of creating
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life.
However
, there are some useful strategies to benefit from the background and observe how effective it can be .citizenry should be
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taught
tough
to accept their faults
instead
of denying them.
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it is a common
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in
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society to
people
escape from their errors. logically it would be better if
people
take responsibility for all things they do even the most terrible ones .by doing
this
, they will know to revise problems
instead
of wiping them up. another
further
step is for parents to teach their kids to avoid
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for
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their mistakes.
this
would help them to combat
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them with
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to refine them and use them in their future
lives
. To sum
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up
, learning from
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history is the best solution for the team who are too young and don't have
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enough
experiences
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. errors can be
recified
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rectified
and used as the best lessons to carry out our
lives
well.
also
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chilren
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children
should
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learnt to study their faults and modify them in order to wit beneficial
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.
this
would lead to a significant
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upheaval
in society and even the country in
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soon future.
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