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Produced of Cotton between 2004 and 2018 in the leading nations

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Cotton
 between 2004 and 2018 in the leading nations For more than a decade some principal nations produced
cotton
to
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 the world, Helping with the production of other products derived from
cotton
 and supporting the economy of its countries. Based on the statistics shown in the graph compares, nations that
more
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produced bales of
cotton
were
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 China and the USA, Brazil with Pakistan produced less, there two
last
 keep quantity during 14 years,
meanwhile
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 India
exceed
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 its
produced
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 in
this
 period.
In contrast
 to the USA with India,
there
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the USA had a significant reduction in its production with respect to other countries.
Nevertheless
, in 2017 there was an increase and remained about Brazil and Pakistan. But China will always have the highest production of bales of
cotton
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structure
Ensure you provide a clear introduction, overview, and conclusion to your essay, as these are essential components. The essay lacks a formal structure which an IELTS examiner would expect.
support
Develop body paragraphs with clear main points, each supported by specific examples or data. This essay requires more detailed information and specific figures to support the statements made.
task response
Your essay must answer all parts of the task. This essay does not address all the requirements of the given task, such as comparing the production of cotton in leading nations across the specified timeframe systematically.
cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices and topic sentences to ensure that your essay flows logically from one idea to another. This essay lacks clear logical progression and connectors that guide the reader through the text.

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