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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or diasgree with this statement.

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We are living in the 21st century where everybody is connected with technology. We cannot imagine our life without mobiles and laptops. Online
newspapers
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 and
books
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 read on mobiles and laptops. ,Yes I agree with
this
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 statement to some extent that
people
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 will not buy printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 and they will use their mobiles and other devices to read them. Life is so fast that
people
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 spend very less
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 at home. They wake up on
time
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 and get ready for their work. They
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 no
time
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 to read a newspaper at home. So they use mobile phones to read the latest
news
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.same with
books
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people
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 like to read
books
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 on tablets and laptops where they spend most
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 working. On the other ,hand
people
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 do not buy
books
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 because they live in very small houses and they felt where they will keep their
books
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. Many
people
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 think spending money on printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 are waste of money. ,
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 so many companies are developing
news
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 and book applications for the
people
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. Kinder is a very good example for us who provide a wide range of
books
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 in one application. No doubt
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 agree with
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 statement but in some ,way
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 do not agree. Some
people
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 feel imagine the life of characters when they read
books
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. So few minorities believe in printing
books
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. One more thing is
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 &
books
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 companies will charge
a monthly subscriptions
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 to
people
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 who buy their products online.
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,
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 I would say that our future is with technology and very soon we will get all the
news
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 and
books
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 on the internet and
printing
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the printing
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 of
books
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 and
newspapers
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 will be reduced day by day.
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