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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or diasgree with this statement.

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We are living in the 21st century where everybody is connected with technology. We cannot imagine our life without mobiles and laptops. Online
newspapers
 and
books
 are
a
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we
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 read on mobiles and laptops. ,Yes I agree with
this
 statement to some extent that
people
 will not buy printed
newspapers
 and
books
 and they will use their mobiles and other devices to read them. Life is so fast that
people
 spend very less
time
 at home. They wake up on
time
 and get ready for their work. They
has
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 no
time
 to read a newspaper at home. So they use mobile phones to read the latest
news
.same with
books
people
 like to read
books
 on tablets and laptops where they spend most
their
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most
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time
while
 working. On the other ,hand
people
 do not buy
books
 because they live in very small houses and they felt where they will keep their
books
. Many
people
 think spending money on printed
newspapers
 and
books
 are waste of money. ,
Moreover
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 so many companies are developing
news
 and book applications for the
people
. Kinder is a very good example for us who provide a wide range of
books
 in one application. No doubt
i
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 agree with
this
 statement but in some ,way
i
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 do not agree. Some
people
 feel imagine the life of characters when they read
books
. So few minorities believe in printing
books
. One more thing is
news
 &
books
 companies will charge
a monthly subscriptions
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a monthly subscription
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 to
people
 who buy their products online.
The
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,
last
 I would say that our future is with technology and very soon we will get all the
news
 and
books
 on the internet and
printing
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the printing
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 of
books
 and
newspapers
 will be reduced day by day.
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