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The demand for food is increasing worldwide. Why has it happened? What measures could the international community take to improve the situation?

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There is no doubt that
food
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 consumption has increased and continues to
Increase
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. Not only the financial growth of the majority but
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 the industrialization of the
food
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industry
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 is responsible for it.
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, collaboration across all demographics can solve
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 a complex issue with ease. First and foremost, an
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 in disposable income is often a contributing factor to an
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 in
food
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demand
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. When the spending power of a person increases, he tends to spend more on the luxuries like having
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 at a restaurant, and
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 wastage at the restaurant is common.
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, no democratic country around the globe wants to restrict GDP or stop people from eating at restaurants, but we can promote the culture of a single person serving. The significant reason for
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 wastage at restaurants is the generous serving size. If we can regulate the size of servings, we might be able to tackle
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 wastage, so the
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.
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, the industrialization of the
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industry
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 can be an underlying reason for increased
food
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demand
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. Like any
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,
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industry
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 looking for widening its profits by marketing or many other tactics to
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 the
demand
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 for its product, which is
food
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.
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, if we can impose heavy taxes on packaged
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 across the world,
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 issue can be mitigated. The taxes on packaged
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, which is a luxury to have, will make it expensive, and restrict consumption. In conclusion,
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 an
increase
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 in purchase power and industrialization of the
food
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industry
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 is the contributing factor to increasing
food
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demand
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, it can be solved through collaborative action like limiting the serving size at a restaurant and taxing heavily the
food
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industry
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.
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