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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts provide information on the country of birth of
people
 living in
Australia
 and the percentage of them living in
cities
 or rural areas of
this
 country.
Overall
, most
of
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people
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the people
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 living in
Australia
 are born in
this
 nation,
only
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and only
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few
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from
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are from
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 the UK. The striking figure is that all of these
people
 largely prefer to live in
cities
 rather
then
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 remote areas. The pie chart shows that almost three
quarter
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quarters
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 of the entire population is born in
Australia
,
only
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and only
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 7%
born
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were born
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 in the UK. New Zealand, China and
Netheralnds
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Netherlands
 born, who live in
Australia
, are between 3% and 1%. The table
illustates
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illustrates
 where the population of
Australia
 lives.
People
 born outside of
Australia
 and New Zealand have the highest percentage of
population
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the population
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 moving
in
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to
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 downunder
cities
. Chinese reached the highest peak of 99% of them settling in
cities
.
While
 Oceanian citizens count the highest percentage of
people
 living in rural areas among others, 17% and 20% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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