In some country, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?

Nowadays,
instead
of
rent
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an apartment or other mansion,
people
tend to have their own house to live with their family. I think
this
is
positive
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thing
that
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for
people
, which now I will explain. The first reason why
people
choose to buy their own
home
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is because of the ownership status itself.
This
means that by owning
home
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a home
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,
people
are freely using their
home
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without any worry anymore for
the
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permission.
For instance
,
people
who want to add some customization in their
home
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are absolutely allowed because
that is
their own
home
. The other example is
people
can use their
home
as another function,
such
as a market, mini café, etc. without any restriction.
Therefore
,
people
will feel more
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to live
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in their own
home
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,
furthermore
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they can develop their own properties. The other reason is
about
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the economic benefit.
This
because
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by owning
the
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house,
people
will save more money by
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spending on
aspect
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the aspect
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that is
not necessary. The aspect,
for example
, is the periodic rent payment which
is
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still must be paid even if the house isn’t occupied like when
people
are on vacation. That payment
also
includes the tax for the government administration for the land
that
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often still
be
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the obligation which demands an extra budget from
renter
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the renter
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. So, by having their own
home
,
people
can have
better
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the better
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financial
condition
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.
Overall
, there are many
people
who want to have their own
home
, which is good for them because they can get
more
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a more
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enjoyable place to live and
also
better financial condition.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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